ގެއަށް ވަތްތަނާ ލާޝީން ދިޔައީ ސިއްސައިގެންނެވެ.ފެނުނު މަންޒަރަކުން ލާޝީންގެ ދެލޯ ކަރުނުން ބަރާވިއެވެ.
އުފާވެގެންކަމެއް ނޫނީ ދެރަވެގެންކަމެއް ނޭނގެއެވެ.
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ވެއްޓިފައި އެއޮތީ އޭނާގެ ބައްޕައެވެ.”ބައްޕާ….”ލާޝީން ގޮވަމުން ދިޔައެވެ.”ލާޝީން…މިހާރު ނިދީގައި ވާހަކަދައްކަންވެސް ފެށީތަ؟”ކައިލީ ސަމާސާ ރާގަކަށް ބުންޏެވެ.ކުރިން،ކައިލީއާ ދިމާލަށް އެއްޗެހި ކިޔާ ލާޝީން
މަޑުމައިތިރި ރާގަކުން ބުނެލިއެވެ.”އެހެންވީމަ މަށަށް ނިދީގައި ވާހަކަ ދައްކާކަމުގެ ލަޤަބު ލިބެން ޖެހޭނެއްނު..”
ލާޝީން އެހެން ބުނުމާއެކު ކައިލީގެ ހިނިގަނޑު ފަޅައިގެން ދިޔައެވެ.”އޭނ ކައިލީ..މަށަށް ކަސްރަތުކުރަން ދެވުނު
ކުރަން ދެވުނު ދޯ؟”ކައިލީގެ ޖަވާބު ކުރެވެ.”ނޮޕް”ދެމަފިރިން ސަކަރާތުގައި ވަގުތު ހޭދަކުރަމުން ދިޔައެވެ.
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މޭތެރޭ ހިތް ތެޅޭގޮތްވޭ،ލޯބިވާ ޔާރާއޭ
ގާތުގާ ހުރުމޭ އެދެނީ،ކީއްވެހޭ މޫނާ ލޯ ފޮރުވީ،ޖާޒުބީ ނޫރާއޭ،މޭރުކަން ލިބުމޭ އެދެނީ
ފަރި ގޮމަޔާ އާދޭ،އަލަތު މަގޭ ލޯތްބާއޭ،ތިޔައޭ ތިޔައޭ މަންޒިލަކީ

ރޭޑިޔޯއިން އަންނަމުން ދިޔަ ލަވަޔަށް،ލާމިން ސަމާލުކަންދިނެވެ.އެ ހީވަނީ އެހިތުގެ މަލިކާއަށް ލާމިން އަމިއްލަޔަށް
ކިޔައިދޭ ވާހަކަ ތަކެއް ހެންނެވެ.

(ނުނިމޭ)
*މި ޕާޓް ކުރުވި ކަމަށްޓަކައި މާފަށް އެދެން*

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21 Comments

  1. Dandelion ?

    July 25, 2018 at 9:28 am

    Salaam guys..here is the 5th part of my first story…mi part kuruvi kamahtakai thiya kiyuntherin ge kibain maafah edhen..next part insha allah on next Wednesday…Aslu Dandelion bunefa innaanee August 1st ga ey..ekamu hama story up kohlaa hithun up kohlee..Readrx r dhimaalah,Dandelion hadikoh talk kohfa hureema sorry…

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 1:58 pm

      Hadikoh talk kurevifai vaanama sorry ingey..

  2. Dandelion ?

    July 25, 2018 at 10:49 am

    Nd Ekm I beynun miadhu one part genesdhen…

  3. Hassan

    July 25, 2018 at 1:06 pm

    I read your comments on part4. And i must say u are so melodramatic.
    Readers ah respectfully talk kuran daskohba furathama. If u are really 12y/o as u claim, then it shows how disrespectful and undisciplined u are.
    And about your story….it’s not good, but u can improve, liyegen improve vaany vx, so instead of bashing on others take other people’s advice and improve your writing. To improve writing u have to read a lot, there are a lot of perfect writers here in esfiya, read their stories and improve. A lot of people say the story is so vaanuvaa….instead of telling them to stop reading and playing victim maybe u should try writing a summary of the story so far so that people understand what actually is happening. If a story is vaanuvaa people lose interest, no one likes to read some sentences which make no sense and waste their time.
    I know mihen buneema you’ll feel like I’m attacking u ey…but no, someone has to tell u out loud these things. Most of ur readers are don’t say what they really want because it might offend u. Dhn mihen buneema like in part4 story medu kandaalanee ey bla bla bla kiyaanee eh noon. Put in more effort and improve.
    Wish u all the best.

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 1:26 pm

      Thanks hassan…bt readrx ah vx alhugandu ge parents aa behumuge haggeh noonnane…Me ge vhk kiyan time waste vangya nukeema kanneyge rangalhu vaany…and e kudhin kiyaa ehcheh kiyan jeheyny alhugandaa dhimaalah…not to my parents or siblings etc…But I’ll do my best…hadikoh talk kurevunythy maafah edhifa innaanee…rangalhu mauloomaath himenehvun edhen…

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 7:49 pm

      Ehen tha? Bt I know it’s not me kan..

  4. Baby girl ❤

    July 25, 2018 at 1:26 pm

    Mi part vess reethi…ekam hussen bunefa inny mulhin dhogu vaahaka eh noon…hope u will correct ur mistakes…. nd Good Luck

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 1:52 pm

      Happy vejje Baby girl ❤ ah mi part kamudhiyaeema…

  5. Its me

    July 25, 2018 at 2:12 pm

    Heii. . Aslu story vrh Vaanuvaa. . Btw thee jazly dhw. I myn real name..

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 2:21 pm

      How you know my nam is Jazlee…Neyge ehnu dhw aee thedhu kameh…hahaha…kuriah huri prt thakun vhk olhun filaane…I’m Jazlee,But I am not from dhonfanu..Aslu edhuvahu readers aa majaa kohlee ey..sorry ingey dhogu hedhuneema guys…

    • Queen Dandelion

      August 30, 2018 at 3:10 pm

      Nope..I will not tell my personal things..biographical and comment ga ee thedhu mauloomaath eh noon yrs fiyavaa..ok

  6. Laisha

    July 25, 2018 at 3:08 pm

    Jazle ulheyne dhonfan ga vx, so I think I ge real name ingunima Ehen rashekey kiyaafa olhuvaalanikan. Right darling…. lai ah varah heevey ehen hen

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 3:30 pm

      Nope, Who r u? Lai ah thi heevee adhi rangalhakah noon..I ‘m Jazlee but not from dhonfanu…Aslu edhuvahu majalakah ehen ky..Faharuga Jazlee eh ulhedhaane dhonfanuga vx..But I am sure it’s not me kan..Asluedhuvahu majaa kohlee ey…

    • laisha

      July 25, 2018 at 6:57 pm

      ok vedhaane hama thihen vx… bt hama 6 ga ulhey jazli eh mi rashuga uheythive buneli..

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 7:48 pm

      Ehen tha? Bt I know it’s not me kan..

  7. Naushin

    July 25, 2018 at 3:18 pm

    Mi story eh tha..vaa nuvaa neyge..

    • Dandelion ?

      July 26, 2018 at 3:03 pm

      Naushin dear??kuriah huri part thakun olhun filaane…

  8. naash

    July 25, 2018 at 5:23 pm

    hadi eh nun stry eh…. but kiyaa nimey iru vaanuvaa ga hunnan jeheny…

    • Dandelion ?

      July 25, 2018 at 5:35 pm

      Sorry dear ??kuriah huri prt thakugai vaagoiy ingeyne.mihaaru vx vrh baivaru faharu stry submit kohfin.Ekam post eh nuvey..
      Thanks naash dear??I’ll try my best ???

  9. naash

    July 25, 2018 at 8:15 pm

    hii varu dhera nukoh kuriah dhiya e ma insha allah kamiyaabu vrne… u can do it dear.. insha allah

    • Dandelion ?

      July 26, 2018 at 6:31 am

      Jakhallah khairan, dear ??Thanks for your support inge

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