އޭރުހިތް ޔާރާދީފާ 1

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1. this is my first story. improve kurumah kiyuntheringe ideas beynunvey.

   1. heevey varah reethi vaanehen.. try kureema rangalhu vaane… first story doesnt mean it should be perfect ey.. try koffa hurikan faahaga kuran.. and thi try ah hama saabas dhen.. adhives ithurah liyun thah (haassa koh vaahakathah) kiyaigen improve kuraane kamah ummedh kuran.. waiting for the next part

2. Feshun ehaa kuru…

3. ehaa touching feshumeh nunn.. maa avas aruvaalaafa ulheyhen heevaneee.. waiting for the next part..

4. GUD BT I DONT C ANY EXPRESSION IN THIS STARTING OF THE STORY

5. gud try, u can do better than this 🙂 n try to make it longer. adhi rangalhah story nefeshi kannenge miulheny dhw. kudakoh dhigu kohlaafa story there ah vadheli nama miah vure furihama vees. best of luck

6. ibaaraai kurun rangalhu kollah eba jehey, ދުވަހަކީ އުޑުމަތި ސާފު ވައިމަޑު ދުވަހެކެވެ. އުދަރެސް ކައިރީގައި ހުރި ވިލާތަކަށް އޮއްސެމުން ދިޔަ އިރުގެ ދޯދިތައް އެޅުމުން ވަނީ އެކި ކުލަތަކުން ދިއްލިފައެވެ. އުތުރުފަރާތުން ހީވަނީ ރަތް ފިނިފެންމާ ބަގީޗާއެއް އޮތް ހެންނެވެ. ދެކުނުފަރާތުން ހީވަނީ އަނގުރު އަލިފާން ރޯވެފައިވާ ހެންނެވެ. މިފަދަ މަންޒަރެއް ބަލަން މީހުން ތިބޭނީ ހިތްހަމަޖެހުމާ އުފަލާ އެކުގައެވެ. ނަމަވެސް ނިޝާ މޫނުމަތިން ފެންނަމުންދަނީ މާޔޫސްކަމާ ހިތާމައެވެ.” mee vara kureege vaahaka fashaa goi, , mikahala gotthaka vaahaka fashaanama reethivaani ethasveeruves hithaamavesri thasveerakah hedhun. komme dialog akee vaki peragraph eh, dhen anethankolhakee vaahaka egge ephisode ninmmairu vaahakaige misraabu konmes varakah dheyhavun v muhimmu, kiyuntherin dhen vaagoi balan kei madhuvaakahala gothakah vaahaka athuran jeheynee.

7. kurin comment gai hithaamaveri thasveerekey bunefai evani vaahakaige main character evaguthu hithaamaveri haalatheggai ineema igey.

8. Gud.try kholyma rangalhuvaane. anekaa saviorge first storyah balaafa hama rangalhu.kamei kaamiyaabu vaany gadha alha masakai kurimaey………… naakamiyaabiyakurimathi laanjehey faharuves annaaney…… ekam khome faharaku egothei nuvaane dhww…………… adhi othy kuriyakan nu. DONT WORRY YOU CAN DO THIS.GUD LUCK.nxt pat avaha up kurachey

9. vvv good

10. kalo men vaahaka laairu font badhal kuranee faruma ah kihineh??????

11. v reethi vaahaka waiting for the next part

12. ފެށުމުގަ އެހާބޮޑު މައްސަލައެއް ނެތް…ދެން ފުރަތަމަ ވާހަކަ ވީމަ ޕާފެކްޓެއްވެސް ނުވާނެދޯ؟ އޮތީ އަނެއްހެން ބުނަންޏާ އެންމެ މައްސަލައެއް…ތަންކޮޅެއް ދިގުކޮށްލީމަ އެމައްސަލަ ހައްލުވެދާނެ

13. vaahakaige ibaaraaiy kurun rangalhu kohllan feney

14. vaahaka dhahka style ah hurikan faahaga
    vey ehenve gina gina in vaahakatan kian feney u can do it

15. Maaaaa kuru fr a feshun..bt its reealy nyc fr a starter. 🙂 ibaaraai kurun kudakh rangalhukhlan feney..n emotions ithuru khlyma vrh rythi vaane..nimmaalaa iru suspens vx onna gothah beyvvyma rythi vaany..eyrun kiyaa myhun next part ah kei madhu vaane..ehn hedhyma vrh interestin kh vaahaka dhaany.. 🙂 all the best..

16. reethi vaahaka eh ekamu maa kureee

17. Kiyun therin vahaka narrate koh dhinyma vahaka liyedhenthw?

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